1) I am an ambitious individual currently attending the University of Florida. My talents include being a great help to those who need, especially those close to me. My aspirations to use my talents in order to help others. This is why my business idea would fit into my goal, it would help a lot of people with their small commuting needs.
2) I am offering people to be part of an eco-friendly community to not only benefit the environment but also help them with their commuting needs.
3) Anyone can join the Gator RIderz pact. It's the club with no restrictions.
4) They care because it will not only help in the environments longevity but will also facilitate in monthly commuting expenses. Instead of 50 dollars to fill up a gas tank, it would reduce to possibly 80 percent.
5) What sets me apart is that I truly care for all customers. It won't matter what kind of membership they would be in, all customers matter.
I do believe all these elements fit well together. All these elements make up a positive person that not only wants to succeed, but it concerned about everyone else's success. There is always room for improvement for the business and myself are not perfect, however, positive reinforcement is always welcomed.
Feedback Memo- for the people I showed from the original napkin assignment, the two core takeaways were:
- Keep it more concise
- Talk about who you want to help more
I incorporated these aspects into a cohesive abridged blog post as you can see above.
Hi Marco! You made it really clear that you enjoy to help others which is a great virtue to have. I believe your service not only helps those around campus with transportation, but with saving money and helping the environment by cutting back on using cars. I do agree that all of the elements fit well with one another with the goal to uplift oneself and those around you. You definitely took the constructive criticism from the last napkin and incorporated it in this one.
ReplyDeleteHi Marco! Both you and I have focused on eco-friendly ideas and I believe that is really important to be educated and passionate about being environmentally friendly. I also really liked how you incorporated your feedback into your post and emphasized simplicity. Simplicity is often over looked but sometimes having too much information can confuse others. I also agree that your elements fit together well and I found that your post was very cohesive, which made it easy to understand. Overall, this was a really great post!
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