https://youtu.be/KfluP16bG5o
I think I improved tremendously from the first elevator pitch I had to do. From the clearness and articulation, overall it was better.
What I stood out as important was the delivery of the message. I did not think any feedback was wrong, I was able to adjust my pitch into something better.
I changed the whole approach of the pitch for the better.
Hey Marco! I liked listening to your elevator pitch because you were both enthusiastic and passionate about your opportunity! However, there are some areas for improvement I would say, but they are minor. For one thing, I would recommend memorizing your speech a little better, as you could tell that you were reading off a script every now and then. Also, I would reduce your hand gestures just a tad because they could get a little distracting at times! Other than those minor critiques, great job! As a side note, I think the background music was a nice touch to your elevator pitch and brought some additional liveliness to the pitch! Wonderful job overall and I cannot wait to see what you do for the final elevator pitch!
ReplyDeleteHi Marco! I really enjoyed your pitch because it is evident how knowledgable and passionate you are. I liked how you used hand gestures because it makes your speech more engaging. Additionally, I liked how you used a scenario because it allows viewers to understand and relate to you. I could see you reading off a script slightly but other than that, you did a really good job!
ReplyDeleteHey Marco,
ReplyDeleteI really liked the approach of your pitch. You set a clear and relatable scene for your audience which will allow them to see how your product is valuable. I wish you elaborated more on how the service will work. Like how will the customer set a bike pickup? Payment options? How much time to allow for when thinking about renting?
But overall, spot on!